January 16, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 01/16




Welcome once again to Six Sentence Sunday. Today's post is another six from my hot contemporary work-in-progress, Midnight Heat.

The following is a continuation of last week's post. A car accident has brought Dominic to Rebecca's ER and he's just beginning to realize just how large a mistake he made walking away from her three years ago.


God, he’d fucked up. If he hadn’t been absolutely sure of that before, he was now. Laying here, her touching him as if he were nothing but another patient instead of the man she’d once confessed to love. Looking at him as if seeing him again was no big deal, as if it wasn’t the giant kick in the ribs that seeing her again was for him.

She was coolly professional; calm and unflustered. While he was…“I’m sorry, Becca.”



Don't forget to check out all of the other Six Sentence Sunday posts. The number of authors grows every week so there's something for everyone, I promise. You can find a list of participating authors, HERE.

Thanks for stopping by.



31 comments:

Fallon said...

Great emotion. I love that first line.

Fallon said...

Okay, I need more coffee, I meant the first two lines. They really set the tone for the little peek we have of this scene.

I absolutely should not be allowed to post before I've had my caffeine LOL.

Sarah Grimm said...

Thanks, Fallon. I'm currently sucking down caffeine and reading through eveyone's #sixsunday posts, too. Not sure I'm making much sense yet, but it's great fun. :)

Jessica Subject said...

I love how you've written this from his point-of-view. I'm sure Rebecca's not as "coolly professional" as he thinks, but he doesn't need to know that. ;)Great six!

Liz said...

You conveyed his emotions in way that was tender but still masculine. Well done.

jenniholbrooktalty said...

What a nice way to start my Sunday! Love the title.

Lisa Fox said...

Aww! I can already tell he loves her.

Sandra Sookoo said...

Nice post! I love it when they realize they really messed up :-)

Dee Carney said...

Oops. I'm not sure if "I'm sorry" will be enough!

Taryn Kincaid said...

Nice job at showing his regrets, Fallon!

Marsha A. Moore said...

Hope she drops her coolness and gives him a second chance. Great internal conflict!

Cate Masters said...

Loved your six! It really made me feel for him.

Jayel Kaye said...

You gotta love a guy who knows when he fucks up. They make the best heros! Great snippet.

heatherthurmeier said...

It's nice when a guy can admit he's sorry. Now it's time to kiss and make up!

Eleri Stone said...

Love how broken up he is over her. Want to give him a hug.

Arlene said...

Hard not to fall for a guy who can admit he cares, and that he's a screw up. Great characterization.

Jo-Anne Kenrick said...

Love this, emotion and regret so clearly defined -- does she forgive him? This clip makes me want more...
Six Sentence Sunday is a lot of fun, but frustrating too because there are too many where I want to read on. LOL

Sarah Grimm said...

Hey everyone, thanks for visiting! Yeah, Dom knows he's screwed up. And yes, Becca eventually forgives him.

Eventually.

She doesn't make it easy on him, though.

Laurie A. Green said...

Oh, I agree with others in that I love being in the male POV, especially when he shows such masculine vulnerability. This scene is awesome. I definitely wanted to read on.

Love what you did with that last line. His regret and longing is palpable.

Emily Cale said...

Great hook! Can't wait to see more.

Lex Valentine said...

I love it when they realize they're wrong. His humility is touching.

Julia Barrett said...

Great little except - almost tells an entire story. I love a tortured hero!

Bianca Swan said...

Thanks for introducing me to Six Sentence Sunday. Nice teaser! I love the pictures in your headline.

Sarah Grimm said...

Again, thanks all of you for stopping by, and for your words of encouragement!

Bianca - all of the pictures in my header came from iStockphoto, a royalty-free photo site.

Leigh D'Ansey said...

Thanks for the introduction to Six Sentence Sunday - a fun thing to do. Male POV is great in your sentences.

P.L. Parker said...

Good job!

Kathleen Grieve said...

Love it! Can't wait to see when and how she forgives him!

Laurie A. Green said...

Sarah, I have an iStock account, but can never seem to find the right pics even after sifting through them for hours. The search feature returns such randomness most of the time. Is there a secret to it?

Alison H. said...

Love the idea of Six Sentence Sunday, and you pack so much into those six sentences!

Kat Lively said...

Nice Six Sunday entry, thanks for sharing!

Eve Cassidy said...

Excellent emotion.