Welcome once again to Six Sentence Sunday. Today's post is another six from my hot contemporary work-in-progress, Midnight Heat.
The following is a continuation of last week's post. A car accident has brought Dominic to Rebecca's ER and he's just beginning to realize just how large a mistake he made walking away from her three years ago.
God, he’d fucked up. If he hadn’t been absolutely sure of that before, he was now. Laying here, her touching him as if he were nothing but another patient instead of the man she’d once confessed to love. Looking at him as if seeing him again was no big deal, as if it wasn’t the giant kick in the ribs that seeing her again was for him.
She was coolly professional; calm and unflustered. While he was…“I’m sorry, Becca.”
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31 comments:
Great emotion. I love that first line.
Okay, I need more coffee, I meant the first two lines. They really set the tone for the little peek we have of this scene.
I absolutely should not be allowed to post before I've had my caffeine LOL.
Thanks, Fallon. I'm currently sucking down caffeine and reading through eveyone's #sixsunday posts, too. Not sure I'm making much sense yet, but it's great fun. :)
I love how you've written this from his point-of-view. I'm sure Rebecca's not as "coolly professional" as he thinks, but he doesn't need to know that. ;)Great six!
You conveyed his emotions in way that was tender but still masculine. Well done.
What a nice way to start my Sunday! Love the title.
Aww! I can already tell he loves her.
Nice post! I love it when they realize they really messed up :-)
Oops. I'm not sure if "I'm sorry" will be enough!
Nice job at showing his regrets, Fallon!
Hope she drops her coolness and gives him a second chance. Great internal conflict!
Loved your six! It really made me feel for him.
You gotta love a guy who knows when he fucks up. They make the best heros! Great snippet.
It's nice when a guy can admit he's sorry. Now it's time to kiss and make up!
Love how broken up he is over her. Want to give him a hug.
Hard not to fall for a guy who can admit he cares, and that he's a screw up. Great characterization.
Love this, emotion and regret so clearly defined -- does she forgive him? This clip makes me want more...
Six Sentence Sunday is a lot of fun, but frustrating too because there are too many where I want to read on. LOL
Hey everyone, thanks for visiting! Yeah, Dom knows he's screwed up. And yes, Becca eventually forgives him.
Eventually.
She doesn't make it easy on him, though.
Oh, I agree with others in that I love being in the male POV, especially when he shows such masculine vulnerability. This scene is awesome. I definitely wanted to read on.
Love what you did with that last line. His regret and longing is palpable.
Great hook! Can't wait to see more.
I love it when they realize they're wrong. His humility is touching.
Great little except - almost tells an entire story. I love a tortured hero!
Thanks for introducing me to Six Sentence Sunday. Nice teaser! I love the pictures in your headline.
Again, thanks all of you for stopping by, and for your words of encouragement!
Bianca - all of the pictures in my header came from iStockphoto, a royalty-free photo site.
Thanks for the introduction to Six Sentence Sunday - a fun thing to do. Male POV is great in your sentences.
Good job!
Love it! Can't wait to see when and how she forgives him!
Sarah, I have an iStock account, but can never seem to find the right pics even after sifting through them for hours. The search feature returns such randomness most of the time. Is there a secret to it?
Love the idea of Six Sentence Sunday, and you pack so much into those six sentences!
Nice Six Sunday entry, thanks for sharing!
Excellent emotion.
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