July 17, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 7/17

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Last week Noah asked Isabeau about the truth.


He couldn’t possibly know of the lie that burned her tongue like acid. “Since when does anyone care about the truth?”


“I care.”


She shook her head in denial. He sounded so sincere she almost believed him. Almost.


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45 comments:

Paula Martin said...

'burned her tongue like acid' - great simile! And the final word delivered a real punch. Great six!

Gem Sivad said...

Emotion, forward movement and dialog that makes you want to know these two. Great six!

Lisa Fox said...

What an intense conversation they are having! And your writing is so colorful. Greta six!

Sandra Sookoo said...

Nice descriptive 6! Love it!

Liz said...

Very telling is so few words!

Liia Ann White said...

I love this story. You're so creative with your writing. Great six!

Cara Bristol said...

Hm....intriguing. Makes me want to know why she doesn't believe him.

Stacey Kennedy said...

Wow! Lots of emotions going on there in 6 sentences! Nicely done!

Randi Alexander said...

Don't believe him, Isabeau! I love the tension. Great six, Sarah!

Cate Masters said...

Intense emotion! In very few words, you portrayed her at the edge of a leap of faith, wanting to believe but not able to. Great six!

Jenna said...

She must be extremely fragile and hurt to want to believe so badly and not be able to. Excellent six

Ranae Rose said...

Sounds like he's got his work cut out for him if he's going to get her to trust him!

Jayel Kaye said...

burned like acid. great stuff!

Jennifer Wilck said...

Excellent--love your use of the language.

sue said...

punchy - more please

JoAnne Kenrick said...

truth burning like acid, OMG I LOVE THIS SIX!! Very emotional and packs a punch for such a short snippet xx

Luxie Ryder said...

Lies do burn like acid on your tongue! Fabulous simile. Great six :)

Carolyn Rosewood said...

Great six!

Bree said...

Love the poignancy of that repeating "Almost"! Emotional six.

Eleri Stone said...

So intense. I want this to work out for both of them.

wearegoingonawitchhunt said...

Awww - he said he cares. Hope she makes it past the 'almost'.

lizculver said...

Quite a hook on the last two lines. Nice six

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

Love the 'acid' lie. That's terrific writing!

Liz said...

great hook, nice six. well done
Liz

diannehartsock said...

Does he usually lie? Sounds like she does! They have a long way to go if they're going to learn to trust each other.

Jessica K said...

Nice balance between the intense image and the simpler language. Whether he can handle the truth depends on what the lie is, doesn't it? ;)

Dee Carney said...

He's going to have to work harder than that!

Melynda Price said...

I loved the descriptive way the "lie burned like acid". Great tension with a hint of deception :)

Lindsay said...

Love the opening lines Great six

Sherry Gloag said...

Great teaser. Why did she 'almost' believe him? I enjoyed this.

Lauri J Owen said...

I also liked the "acid" comparitor. Great six!

Joanne Stewart said...

love that last paragraph. tells me a lot about her. Great six!

Xakara said...

What wonderful emotion! :)

~Xakara
Dawn's Early Light 6SS

Dren said...

Great description! Very intense!

Jennifer said...

Hi Sarah! So happy to see you here! This is my first day participating in SSS. Love your six!
Thanks!

Lorien Velez said...

Great interaction and show of emotion. More please.. :)

lexcade said...

I love the tension and intensity. Great descriptions!

ursulawhistler.com said...

Good job on these.

Zee Monodee said...

This is so intense and emotional! Great job!

Kathleen Grieve said...

Yes, but is her continued mistrust hurting her? I have to wonder. This scene has really great tension and dialogue! :)

Pippa Jay said...

Awe, won't she please give him a chance?

Lucy Felthouse said...

Wow, I'm intrigued. Does he deserve her doubt? :)

Vivien Jackson said...

Gorgeous, effortless rhythm. I finished the six and was itching to keep reading. That kind of flow is rare.

Lynne Murray said...

Very spare prose, but full of undertones. Intriguing six!

E. Jamie said...

Great snippet!